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Lol, but seriously, not a bad attempt. I think your drums could use a little more power. While this is a matter of taste for the most part it is definitely something I would recommend for a better mix.
Your bassline was pretty good, it got a little weird at times, but that's totally ok.
As far as actual music composition though I think that this song is a bit lacking, it doesn't feel like the song moves forward or changes very much, it just seems like some random patterns in the same key with some variations on those patterns.
As I said I liked your bassline but you need more than that. You had some choral stuff going on and I liked that but other than that it was almost entirely a bassline and drums. In addition to that you need some higher frequency instrument or something to go along with it so that you can create a melody to go with you bassline
I liked it, and I hope I don't come off as harsh but I'm just offering some constructive criticism.
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