The art style was interesting, and it looked pretty good overall, but it was a little bit simple, try adding some shading and details to your stuff, it adds a lot more than you might think. . .
The button in the right hand corner was a little hard to see, it took me a minute to find it. . .
The story itself was pretty interesting, and I'm looking forward to more of this.
The choice of song was pretty good and it went along with the mood and feeling of the song and story.
The font in you dialog boxes was a bit difficult to read, and if I can't read the story how can I follow it, it needs to be a bit more legible. . .
Overall very nice!
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If I have enough time I'm gonna redo the text in the final release, as for the shading, I'm not really good with color so I think if I tried something more complex I would fuck it up. but hopefully as my skills improve so will my art.
Thanks for the review!
10/10 and 5/5 for Bieber Headshot!
This is gold, and so is the audio track.
Your video helped add on some even funnier elements to the video,
I.E. Axman13(years old)
The typography went very well with the voice acting.
Hilarious, great job
I AM FREE!!! BLAAARGH!
Lol, but seriously, not a bad attempt. I think your drums could use a little more power. While this is a matter of taste for the most part it is definitely something I would recommend for a better mix.
Your bassline was pretty good, it got a little weird at times, but that's totally ok.
As far as actual music composition though I think that this song is a bit lacking, it doesn't feel like the song moves forward or changes very much, it just seems like some random patterns in the same key with some variations on those patterns.
As I said I liked your bassline but you need more than that. You had some choral stuff going on and I liked that but other than that it was almost entirely a bassline and drums. In addition to that you need some higher frequency instrument or something to go along with it so that you can create a melody to go with you bassline
I liked it, and I hope I don't come off as harsh but I'm just offering some constructive criticism.
Nice heavy bass intro, that's a nice synth you got there. I like the development of your song too. For not having much of idea where you were going with this one I think you did a pretty decent job. You've got some interesting changes throughout the song but I think your bassline could use a lot more variance, it's quite repetitive and just moving your progression around with it can have a huge effect on a song. I like the 8-bit sounds towards the end, it's pretty cool and catchy, but overall I think a bit too repetitive.
Good work though man, and I still need to show you some stuff in Sytrus, hit me up with a PM, we'll work out something.
Nice work overall
Loving the piano intro. Just a tip, you wanna bribe me to like a song? Have mad piano rhythms.
I really like your composition and your musical development, it's totally epic.
My only complaint about your pony songs in general. Not enough Rainbow Dashy :(
Anyways. I really like your DnB I think it's some of your best work and you should try to produce a little more to that extent, I think it's where you shine.
This song gets the to the ipod an award given to only a few rare talented artists (let me put it like this, probably one of every 100 songs I listen to on NG gets there... If that)
I like the way the girl in the middle is drawn and she looks pretty good.
The Umbrella makes me think of the moon and I like the way that looks too.
The flowers and everything coming up all around her were pretty cool and I liked the "raindrop" that she was catching, I think this is a really cool painting!
One small thing, I think her nose looks just a tad on the long side, like the penguin from batman or something, I don't know if you wanted it to be like that or not, but I think it would look a little better if it was just a tad smaller. . .
Overall this is one of my favorites of yours!
Thank you again! This one to me has the most "complete" feel to it story wise. I knew where I was going with it and it's apparent in the picture.
I like the style of this one, it's pretty interesting and there is quite a lot going on in this painting.
It's really good for freehand and I'm very impressed, though I would like to see a bit more detail in the arms and limbs of your drawings. . .
I liked the way that the girl in the center was the focal point while everything else seemed attached to her, it gave the painting a lot more interesting look.
Overall it's pretty good!
Arms and hands are my major weakness, and something that I continue working on. Thank you so much for the good review!
What's this I don't even. . .
The subject matter is a little questionable, I'm not quite sure what your trying to convey with this if anything at all.
The actual art style wasn't bad, and it's really good for freehand.
I've never really liked the exaggerated art style, but the drawing itself is pretty good. . .
Not bad at all
To be honest it was an image that just came into my head. Thank you for the review!
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